This is less a poem than a linguistic rebellion. Rather than merely breaking grammatical rules, it questions who gave language the authority to dictate experience in the first place. “Liberated Grammar” feels like an attempt to restore language to its primal state where words are not fixed categories but living actions. The poem’s force lies in its refusal to let syntax imprison consciousness. Whether one embraces or resists it, the work compels us to reconsider the relationship between language, identity, and creative freedom. A genuinely provocative experiment.
I love you always introduce a new element of poetry in your writing everytime. It shows how much you deeply think and write. I can't like it cuz it do not resonate with me well. But, happy to know something new.
This is less a poem than a linguistic rebellion. Rather than merely breaking grammatical rules, it questions who gave language the authority to dictate experience in the first place. “Liberated Grammar” feels like an attempt to restore language to its primal state where words are not fixed categories but living actions. The poem’s force lies in its refusal to let syntax imprison consciousness. Whether one embraces or resists it, the work compels us to reconsider the relationship between language, identity, and creative freedom. A genuinely provocative experiment.
Dude it's genuinely so good, my mind is blown! I love everything about your 'liberated grammer' this poem is just ICONIC
It takes a lot of ideas I had been playing with and pushes them forward.
Glad you are enjoying, I'll keep pushing.
I’m amazed bro, this is incredible.
I'd being slipping Liberated Grammar into my poems for weeks before Break it Down hit -
Sixteen.
She Knickerbocker gloried the afternoon.
Salt-slick. Sunburnt. Jukebox laughing.
Strawberry syruped everything.
Spun sugar rebellion through the teeth.
Sherbet kissed. Spoon clinked.
Feet not yet sliding the floor.
That was the first taste of her.
The body filed it.
Smiled it.
Thirty years it sat.
https://upsilona1.substack.com/p/knickerbocker
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Well, damn ok. Consider me schooled! ✨
Gorgeous written 🌸
Thank you
Understood sir x
Never seen grammar butchered so successfully.. you could sell those chops..
I love that. Thank you
That second stanza. Is vibrantly fierce.
Deliberately so. Just to show what's possible
That’s such a great poem. It all came marching out.
Thanks John. Hopefully just the start.
I love you always introduce a new element of poetry in your writing everytime. It shows how much you deeply think and write. I can't like it cuz it do not resonate with me well. But, happy to know something new.
Thanks for reading. This is one poem in an evolving form. It's deliberately abrupt. Check back later.
Yeah, sure! Currently reading other substacker's post. Will definitely complete pending reads of yours! 🤗🤗
Beautiful ❤️